高分悬赏 英语六级作文估分

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在这个暑假里,我看了一本名为《远大前程》的书,作者是查尔斯·狄更斯,他是英国最著名的作家之一。他写了很多精彩的小说。这本书是他的作品之一。

人们通常喜欢拿自己与朋友们比较。这对人们而言，是一个致命的缺陷。如果别人很富有,那么我们也希望自己很有钱。如果我们周围都是些穷人,那么我们同样不会介意自己很贫穷。由于生性愚钝,我们不会感到惭愧。这是一个社会问题。

如果我们不曾拥有过,那就不会介意失去。由于不想变得富有,我们才不会因贫穷而感到沮丧。

这部小说的主角是Pip(亨德尔)。在他还是个婴儿的时候，他的父母就去世了。是他姐姐一手把他抚养长大的。后来，姐姐嫁给了村里的铁匠Joe Gargery。他们并不富有,Pip也从没上过学。但他过得很开心,因为所有的朋友都喜欢他。对他们而言，这不是不幸，这只是他们的生活。但是一个偶然的机会,他帮助了一个囚犯，给了他很多食物。之后他又遇见了一个性格古怪但却很富有的老妇Havisham小姐。

四年后,Havisham小姐想让他搬离自己家，并把Pip教育成为一个待他成年后期望继承一大笔遗产的绅士。

听到这些，Pip开始藐视他的那些穷朋友。他甚至因为曾与穷人为伍而感到羞耻。Pip的“远大前程”破坏了他的生活。这部小说告诉我们不能与他人攀比。不要嫉妒别人的钱财。如果将来有一天你成了一个富人,请别轻视你的穷朋友们。

一年之计在于春
Spring is a beautiful season, I like spring, because everything in the spring recovery, very beautiful scenery. There is a saying that "Spring is the in the year " in the spring we have to study hard, seize the time.
With another Full, vibrant spring, we started a new journey in the spring, I and other students as a new outlook. First of all, I would like to carry forward the spirit of studying hard, and strive to forge ahead and maintain a good attitude study; Secondly, attention should be paid to the efficiency of classroom learning, to concentrate on classroom lectures, structured notes to do a good job. Reasonable arrangements for class study time, review a good first day in an orderly manner by the basic science knowledge, and then deal with related exercises, and not just to complete the operation. In addition, I would like to continue to improve study methods, so as to effort.
I believe that in the new semester, I will certainly be able to scale new heights.


患难见真情
Remember that three years ago just born my baby not long, one day, unfortunately suddenly fell, half of the body can not move, joint pain unable to walk, sleep, because my children are still breast-feeding, breast-feeding fears impact of medication, not Renzhe To the hospital for an examination, has been going on for a week, the pain is really no way but to go to the hospital, who knows that his findings in the rheumatoid, was not aware of this terrible disease, access to relevant information to be aware of rheumatoid Fear and serious. Emergency weaning children every day in the major hospitals Qunxun, examination, treatment, Datan everywhere where there is vaccine or treatment, and since then I know what Chen Jiang, what is the anti-O, what is ESR, in hospital out-patient rheumatoid Can see all types of patients, and some can be said to be shocking. I was also very serious disease, the ESR of up to 72, the indexes are very bad, not walk, dress to help people at home and even have difficulty squeezing toothpaste, Wannianjuhui, had previously heard a long time without Xiaozai Bingchuang Qian, Moreover, the disease I have no sign of improvement, so I had to carry a burden of serious thinking, their very afraid that one day will really paralyzed in bed, then I very young children how to do » ! Fortunately, my parents and I, continue to encourage me, meticulous care for me, has given me confidence, there are a lot of my friends constantly concerned about the provision of information and experts in the treatment of rheumatoid doctor to me.
Initially, I just have to see in Chinese medicine, because I believe that the motherland's national essence, but read about a year, three Dayton Chinese medicine every day, even with all Aohao mission of Chinese medicine, illness or no major improvement, Chinese medicine is the treatment of chronic, the results may not have Western medicine to the fast, I see people at home are so acute pain in his heart, persuaded me try to look at Western medicine, I am very lucky in the medical clinic met Dr. Xu Jianhua, I personally think that her treatment I am very suitable for the use of drugs is simple, just before eating the traditional Chinese medicine into methyl Liu Dan, the Chinese Pa Fulin also opened as usual to eat, severe pain when serving Fenbi De plus, adhere to medication every day, after a period of time Treatment is very significant, about six months after the indexes tend to turn for the better, in addition to rainy days and is now the turn of the seasons when the body feel a bit uncomfortable, the rest are really good, but also enhance immunity, the common cold is not easy, and now self-confidence Show in my face, in the park, playground, shopping malls and we can see the shadow of a three well-being.
两篇作文都写啦，你选一篇吧。第一篇用词比较简单，后面那篇比较复杂。

根据四六级评分标准，9-10分
你的语法错误较多,虽然你用了一些平时不常用的词,但错误语法太多.尤其在第一段,会给老师留下不好印象.第一段:21st后忘加century,显得不规范，occurred过去式用在这里不妥
第二段第一句中的is应改为are
第三段，first与second后的get应改为getting,first后的need应改为needs，
second后的do应该为does，second后的need应改为needed或in need,last后的get应改为getting,好像last应改为lastly
再加上三个单词拼写错误，还有第二第三都用了firsr...second...的结构过于老套，六级作文更多的是关注句型句式和整篇文章结构，而不是用一些生僻的单词

根据六级作文评分标准，你的作文在10分左右，因为有少量错误，最主要的是句式单一，should 和 thoroughly understanding 等重复出现次数过多，而且论证不充分，说理不足，导致作文档次降低。

六级作文采用总体评分(global scoring)方法，阅卷人员就总的印象给出奖励分(reward scores)，而不是按语言点的错误数目扣分。我们要从内容和语言两个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体。作文应表达题目所规定的内容，而内容要通过语言来表达，要考虑作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑是否用英语清楚而合适地表达思想，也就要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。这里我将对是否用英语充分表达思想解释一下，也许大家看到hot door的时候可能会想到热门，因为我们使用了back-translation, 我们在用中文的思维方式替学生考虑，来猜测他想要表达什么意思，但是在改试卷当中，这是绝对不允许的，我们必须严格按照英语的思维来考虑，试想一个英语国家的人看到这个表达方式的时候他肯定是不会没明白这个是什么意思的。也就是说，在真正实际批改中，如果你出现i is, you am等现象，或者一个单词少了一个字母这些情况我们是不会太在意的，如果语言的错误 导致了我们不能够使用英语的思维来理解，那么分数就高不上去了。
阅卷的标准分为5等，2分、5分、8分、11分和14分。另有标准样卷，我们参照样卷对大家的作文进行评分，首先人们和哪个档次的样卷接近，则上下浮动1分。

2分标准：条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子都有错误，且多数为严重错误。

5分标准：基本切题，表达思想不清楚，连贯性差，有较多的严重语言错误。

8分标准：基本切题，有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯，语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。

11分标准: 切题，表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。

14分标准：切题，表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好，基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错

语法你跟着老师教的学就行了 考试主要还是词汇的掌握 建议你多去看句子被单词
学习方法自己感觉 网上别人的经验很多的 自己找吧可以借鉴不可照搬
（关注你考试那年的体型 多做联想 祝你成功）
给你个网上的建议：
delfman
先说说战绩吧:
六级这次648,没上次的四级分数高(06年6月的四级,655)
听力和阅读满分,24和27题的争议也算解决了,我选的答案没错
24是选prescribing medications,27是选maximizing profits(有点不明白新东方的答案是怎么选出来的,做题的人要么英语不好,要么思维逻辑有问题,虽然成绩出来前网上一直有争论,但我从来没怀疑过自己的选择)
综合被扣了30分,和估算的扣28.4差不多,2道词汇和3道改错没做对
作文低了点,15分里只拿了10.5分的样子,不过时间有点紧,收尾很仓促,也算意料之中的事.

总结一下得失:
听力和阅读2个部分满分是让人挺高兴的一件事,大家看过我以前做的一个去年6月4,6级成绩统计的帖子的话可以看到没有人是有任何2个单项满分的,呵呵.这可能是因为4级考过了,而这2部分和4级类似,所以属于有经验了.
综合部分由于题型有些不同,在改错那里错了3个,属于水平不到,没看出来.词汇那里错了2个,其中一个头脑发热给选错了,怪我自己,另一个是扫得太快,没把4个选项都看全就选了一个冒似正确的,但当时确实是有疑问的,但不知道什么原因,也没回过去再检查一下,遗憾...
作文由于时间没有掌握好,作文开写前去检查了一下前面的题目,导致作文时间不够,所以结构不太满意,收尾很仓促.

建议:
首先,一切成绩都来自于平时的努力,而其中的大部分又来自于练习,熟能生巧嘛.
听力和阅读是送分的部分,理解原文是关键,只要理解了,那些选项都应该很简单的,所以平时还是要多听多看.
词汇部分只有靠平时积累了,6级和4级的这部分的差别就在于6级会列出更多同意词或近意词,考察的似乎是习惯的用法和搭配.
改错则可以多看看那些题目分析,把几大类的错误详细分析记住,然后根据上下全文意思带到具体的句子里去分析,这部分和惯用搭配也有联系,比如这次改错中有一个made possibly,乍一看verb+adverb的搭配没什么问题,但实际上在这里是错误的.所以这部分需要的是"积累+经验+技巧".
作文部分我就不多谈了,有关写作技巧的文章太多了,主要也就是多练习,打好框架后再动笔,避免语法和用词甚至拼写错误,这样及格是没问题的.

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